Growing up in a modest village in China, I hardly ever had the chance to see many examples of modern technology; people who dig wells by hand to obtain drinking wateruse ox-driven plows to cultivate their fields don’t have much use for televisiopersonal computers. But when my father gave me an old radio to play with, I wanted nothing more than to take apart the contraptionsee what i ide made such interesting sounds. Sitting on the floor with a confused grin, surrounded by wiresmetal, I looked up at my fatheraskedthe noises were…(有刪節(jié))
合理地闡述了申請(qǐng)者學(xué)習(xí)電子工程的動(dòng)機(jī)，學(xué)習(xí)動(dòng)機(jī)是評(píng)審委員非�？粗械摹Ｍ瑫r(shí)，讀了這段文字，會(huì)使讀者沉浸在對(duì)童年往事的美好回憶里，借此打動(dòng)評(píng)審委員的心。
另外一篇修改過的文章開頭用詩一般的語言寫道(有刪節(jié))：
……I first read this paragraphMadame Curie as a 14-year-old child,I still remember how wonderful I felt. I remember thinking, “What esteemed men they were! How hard they worked!” As I grew older, this paragraph became a source of encouragement in the face of adversity. I begin to feel a magical blue light twinkling in my heart, kindling a love of science,encouraging me to charge bravely into the unknown world.
結(jié)尾呼應(yīng)了開頭，闡述了作者為什么要去美國讀書：
I never forgot my adolescent idol, Maria Curie. As I re-read the book, another pa age leaped out: “She was now 24-an age when some of her great contemporaries were to be on the brink of major discoveries… Maria took the trainWarsaw to Paris, the intellectual Mecca.”
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